Feedback on Assignment 0

JUP 250Y
November 2005

The original assignment specification is available here.


1. Marking Scheme

This assignment is worth 1%.


2. Decoding Feedback

Electronic submissions: Those who sent me electronic submissions will find comments beginning with ">>". I tried not to interleave them into your paragraphs for readibility, but sometimes it was easier to interleave my comments so you know what I'm reacting to.

Paper submissions: All comments in red ink.

Comments that are general and recurring are posted on this page, discussed at length. Please read through this page carefully.


3. Comments on Thesis Statement

Topics: Lack argument | Replicating existing debates | Assumptions and intuitions | Overgeneralization across levels of representation

Lack argument

This is not a survey paper. Please see my notes on argumentation. A couple of related points follow.

When presenting existing models, please use your own words. Some terminology is necessary, and please be sure to define them precisely. When you rephrase other proposals, you will likely identify gaps in their argument or problems in their model. You'll also be able to narrow the topic into something more manageable.

Replicating existing debates

Since these debates already exist, why are we still writing about them? The point of this paper is not to replicate the argument into a class paper, but to critcally analyze the debate. That is, what are the questions being addressed? What are they missing? What kinds of assumptions are being made? What kinds of evidence are they using, or lack? Why is there still a debate to date? What makes the problem so hard to solve?

Assumptions and intuitions

You'll find that most of my comments are written in the form of questions. If you see this, it means that there are assumptions made that have not been justified. It's important to tease apart these assumptions from the argument. Some points seem very intuitive, but intuitions without justification are bad. Don't use them!

Overgeneralization across levels of representation

A common problem is mixing up paradigms, frameworks, theories, models and instances of them. When you read a paper, try to make clear what the framework is and tease it apart from the actual implementation that those particular researchers decided to take. Example: Connectionism is not equivalent to neural networks.


4. Comments on References

It's hard to give comments to just a list of references, without knowing the topic or the intended argument. Here are some comments that pertain to references in general.

Topics: General vs. specific references | Citation format | Primary vs. secondary references | Literature selection

Genearl vs. specific references

In presenting an argument, you will need to talk about general theories and concepts. This kind of discussion requires general references, such as books and journals. However, when you make a point in an argument, the discussion will require specific references that point to evidence in support of the point being made. These references will often be experimental results or computational results, such as those found in journals and conference papers. Some books will cite other works that fall in this category of specific references. In this case, if you cite references that were used in books you read, they become secondary references. They require a different format, as discussed illustrated below.

Citation format

A somewhat minor point: please pick a citation format and stick to it. A citation usually includes the first author's last name and the year of publication. If a quotation is used, a page number is required. Example: (Smith 2001).

This citation is used as an "index" in the references. The citation is then expanded with the full list of authors, title of the work, book title of the work, year, and other necessary information. Example:

(Smith 2001) J. Smith. Some title. Journal of Educational Psychology. 13(1):209-215. 2001.

When citing an edited book or a collection of papers, don't just cite the editors. Please cite specifically which papers/chapters you used.

Primary vs. secondary references

In your references, list only papers/books/etc. you have read. If you have not read them, but other people are citing them, and you would like to make that citation, that is in fact a "secondary reference", because you got that reference through a primary source at hand. Believe it or not, it is easy to figure out which references are read (and understood) and which aren't. There are at lesat two clear ways of acknowledging secondary references:
  1. Create a references section called "Secondary References". List those sources under this heading, in the same format as the primary sources.
  2. Keep them in the same reference section, but change the style so that the primary source is included. For example:
    [some text] so and so said this works 90% of the time. (Lee 1999)

    [references] 9. (Lee 1999) John Lee. Some title. Journal of Educational Psychology. 11(2):123-129. 1999.

    If you didn't read (Lee 1999) and only got the information and reference from another book, (Feldman 2001), the above reference would need to be changed to the following:
    [some text] so and so said this works 90% of the time. (XYZ 1999, from Feldman 2001)

    [references] 9. (Lee 1999, from Feldman 2001) John Lee. Some title. Journal of Educational Psychology. 11(2):123-129. 1999.

    And (Feldman 2001) would be listed in the references as well.

Literature selection

Be selective! Make sure your references are reliable. How? Here are some rought categories and comments for each:


5. Proofreading

A nicety in paper quality is its readability. Please try to proofread and make it easier for the reader. Don't leave room for the reader to guess what you're trying to say. Some comments on general
writing style.


6. Assignments Received

If you sent a submission but your name is NOT listed below, please send me an email about it ASAP and attach your submission!

Submissions received:

Jessica Aubut
Matthew Bexter
Sagan Bolliger
Renaud Boulanger
Aylish Chantler
David Chen
Anne Coulson
N.Elida Detfurth
Alex Djedovic
Amanda Dragland
Lauren Drvaric
Melissa Ellamil
Lea Epstein
Kenny Euler
Roman Feiman
Alyson Glimour
John Hardy
Mike Harowicz
Aaron Henry
Cindy Hok
David Hubbell
Najmus Ibrahim
David Kim
Aaron Lee
Sohoon Lee
Kevin Leung
Andy Yu-Ching Lin
Daniel Ly
Catlin May
Greg McBride
Kathryn McKernan
Nejla Moghtaderi
Christian Morey
Aaron Meyer
Amanda Mykusz
Hugh O'Hara
Dimitra Panagiotogiou
Nadia Pendjerkova
Kevin Phang
Kaspar Podgorski
Amanda Pogue
Mike Potash
Rob Potter
Melinda Punzalan
Anne Sealey
Brendan Smith
Daniel St Bernard
Rebecca Stein
Hendrick Sukardi
Lucy Xiaoxi Sun
Nikki Tollenaar
Vanessa Vinci
Yue Xin
George Ye
Jeffrey Yun